notes of a voyeur

my weekly flash fiction on Hijacked Amygdala is up. it’s about a voyeur. Oh, go on, do check it out and don’t forget the other excellent posts by mad folks…

hijacked amygdala

img_9897 art by poo reun

i have fallen into the habit of waiting for her in the mornings.

i like to watch her struggle with the cafe’s heavy glass doors, yellow bike helmet in one hand, large purple messenger bag slung across her chest. once inside, she scans the room and moves quickly to the table by the window, the only one with free seats, where i am. she offers me a polite smile and points to the chair opposite me. i look up from my book, feign distraction, then nod before i return to reading.

she pulls out laptop, mobile phone, and novel from her bag and place them on the table. she’s halfway through the old man and the sea. last week she was reading henry miller’s tropic of cancer. she opens up her laptop and orders from a hovering waitress without looking at her or the…

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6 comments

  1. This story is written in such a rich way that the nuances of the interactions between strangers are apparent. Lovely work.

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  2. I’m not sure what the problem is but I don’t seem able to comment or like on the Hijacked Amygdala site from my phone…so …yeah..

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  3. oh also I find it strange that other people thought your protagonist was male – it didn’t feel that way to me, but everyone takes their own perspective

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    • It’s interesting that most men thought the narrator was male and women thought the narrator was female. I wonder if I should be more specific about gender. But I wanted to leave it subtle because then it adds more nuance to the experience. When I wrote it, I was clear that the narrator was a woman.

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  4. I wouldn’t worry about pointing out gender, it makes it more enlightening when someone can get a different slant on your work. I felt that she was a socially awkward but lonely woman, living through observing others to detract from something else going on in her life. I didn’t sense any predation but I figure everyone reads a story as if they are the lead role don’t they!

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